People often see what others are in on one side because that’s how people see them. Everyone sees you are a good person on one side, but they haven’t yet seen your other half. What you show to them is your half, and the other one, that you swore to yourself that you would never reveal until you’re pushing up daisies.
For my side of things, revealing one’s true nature leaves people asking to one question, what are you really? For me, I am deceitful, as this is my beloved darker half. The one who protects my vulnerable being. The cheery disposition with a happy-go-lucky face, hides behind the poker faced twin inside of me, shielding me from the most hurtful words that I could possibly hear. They don’t mean any harm to what they say, but the words they speak has a different effect to me. They do not speak real to me, I do not speak real to them. I talk only the way the would like to understand, trying to separate myself from the tortures of the world, at least he can take a number, unlike myself, one hit, and I”m done for.
Being with my other self is a blessing and an ode to joy. Whenever I’m in trouble, he’s the one gets me out of the pinch. Whenever I feel sad, he’s the coulder I cry on. He’s my most beloved person, strong, courageous, and firm with what he says, unlike me, so I’ve decided, I want to be like him. That way, I won’t need someone to shield me from harm, I won’t need someone to pick me up when I’m down. And someday, I won’t need my other self.
But for now, I can’t have a single-sided coin, I need him and he needs me, and that’s all that matter to me. Being happy with my other self, my other side of the coin.
November 21, 2008 at 4:03 pm
I like this article not because I love coins (I prefer bills, and checks) but because of the sincerity of the author. There are some sentence fragments but with minor corrections, this article could be one of the best.
My verdict: 1.25
November 23, 2008 at 9:24 am
I agree with Nicko. I like the idea of coin. It reminds me of Two-Face from Batman/ The Dark Night.
GRADE: 1.50
November 24, 2008 at 10:44 am
This article scares me, so this must be a real DARK side story of a person.
Dad Nico is right, there are some errors in sentence fragment. It may certainly confuse the readers. But I’ve got the message you’re trying to imply. A good article! ^_^
Grade: 90
November 24, 2008 at 10:46 am
Nice article that revolves around the two sides of the coin thing. very informative. there are a number of grammatical errors abound but still the article is solid.
grade: 1.75
November 24, 2008 at 10:49 am
JM is a good writer. even in his works and words, he showed how honest he is. I like the mysterious effects of the article.
Grade: 87
November 24, 2008 at 10:58 am
you really reveal your self.. and i feel the message of the article. a good article
grade: 90
November 26, 2008 at 4:36 am
I imagine you crying while writing this. The heavy droplets of tears obscuring your vision from the typos and grammar booboos. But don’t get me wrong I understand you.
I profess that I don’t agree with your solution of deceit. You need to be very careful, the exposed half always consumes the real half. It only takes time. Yet surely, and SOON the true you would be lost and you’ll be left feeling half empty.
By the way, are you sure the mannequin you display for the public is truly the strong one? You never know the one hiding may actually be darker. I do know that it made you do foolish things and made you lie to people. I can’t really judge I need more details and the article was lacking about specifics.
This article is a toss-up between 91 and 92%.
November 26, 2008 at 10:11 am
Grade: 95
You always were unique, this article can’t even express the half of who you really are. What you do and why you do it I might never understand, but for a writer you can be very poetic.
November 26, 2008 at 11:30 am
i would have to agree with what pike has said. that this article can’t even express even half of who you really are. i see you as a really mysterious person.. and we always have to dig deeper on the ‘YOU’ that you make us see.
anyway. this one is pretty good. a 95% for you.
November 26, 2008 at 11:35 am
Well, you need to check out spelling, grammar, sentence construction, hanging modifiers, etc., before posting. The analogy, I beg to disagree, may not be that appropriate. Coins have two faces. But somehow, both of them are not hidden. So comparing your self with a personality that can be observed by the public vis a vis a personality that you want to be hidden is not exactly apt.
Rather, if you fake what the public sees in you and hide the real you, then there must be something awfully wrong in that. There is a problem of bi polarity and that is not simply having a dark side.
A dark side presumes vulnerability to some stimuli and that side shows either by responding to it or running away from it. I’d rather you compare yourself to a hermit crab that hides inside a shell and then when it’s shell is broken, it buries itself in the sand. It is brave only because it hides beneath the shell.
So, check out your article again. (77)
November 26, 2008 at 11:36 am
I agree with Kit, sure thing this article is scary.
Just a little piece of advice, I would rather have the “cheerful JM” I used to know than being a loner.c:
90% for you! Good job!c:
November 26, 2008 at 11:44 am
hehe.. This article is a very short one. It is hanging with details. It didn’t elaborate clearly what the author is really pointing about. The words he used is very deep and so was the author. Also, the author didn’t explain much of what he really is. But then, the title is very unique and the article was written good! =D
Grade:88
November 26, 2008 at 11:46 am
coin coin coin.. yeah, its nice! ;P
GRADE: 1.75
November 28, 2008 at 10:42 am
i like this article. though short, it was real…. there were some minor errors in sentence fragments but the article was really good. You could feel the sincerity of the author…nice job JM…
1.25
November 28, 2008 at 11:09 am
“They do not speak real to me, I do not speak real to them. I talk only the way the would like to understand, trying to separate myself from the tortures of the world, at least he can take a number, unlike myself, one hit, and I”m done for” -look at me and then SPEAK.
i agree with nicko at luisa. I like the coin thing.
Grade: 96
November 28, 2008 at 11:10 am
a weird and mysterious side of the author eeh ..
it could have been better if you sight some examples of the author’s dark side. but still the article is good.
a 90% for you JM. ^^
November 28, 2008 at 11:53 am
your emotions and sentiments shows in your article.
GRADE :92
December 5, 2008 at 10:20 am
Jm, just be yourself, try to be comfortable interacting with other people.
* Be real *
GRADE: 90